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05-07-2022 08:10 PM
05-07-2022 08:10 PM
A new poem
Not sure if this is the best way to post this, but I thought I'd run with it for now. Apologies if there is a better way/place to share this on the forums.
Anyway, this is my most recent poem. I've been wrestling with it for quite some time, and have finally decided to release it into the wild. You saw it here first, folks 🙂
It's not really about anything solid, more just a bunch of words and images I threw together. I describe it as "abstract" or maybe "surreal" for want of better terms.
Feedback appreciated
@Shaz51 @MDT @TAB @greenpea @Appleblossom @Clawde
(List nowhere near complete, just some names that came to mind quickly)
The Underneath
The underneath is a simple place
Undisturbed by expectation
There inertia accelerates
In pursuit of a golden silence
A relentless void of scattered screams
Far too dispersed to be heard
An emptiness full of the waves
Of frozen melancholy
This landscape conjures a certain dread
Yet dreams continue in their quest
To install eternal smiles
On the faces of the forgotten
In tribute to the desperation
Driving today into tomorrow
Sense no longer seems essential
Provided the sun still sets
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Prone to bouts of inspiration
Suffered in response to life
I submit to the ecstasy
That succeeds the saddest laughter
StuF
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05-07-2022 08:37 PM
05-07-2022 08:37 PM
Re: A new poem
um did you mean to use 'succeed' in last bit? Did you mean come after ?
Anyway onya. More create than my last 7 years output lol
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05-07-2022 08:42 PM
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05-07-2022 08:43 PM
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Re: A new poem
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05-07-2022 08:45 PM
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05-07-2022 08:52 PM
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Re: A new poem
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05-07-2022 09:04 PM
05-07-2022 09:04 PM
Re: A new poem
I expect to get a few people with that @TAB lol
It was originally "follows" but "succeeds" sounds better imo
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05-07-2022 09:08 PM
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Re: A new poem
.. I succeeded as follows..
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05-07-2022 09:57 PM