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StuF
Senior Contributor

A new poem

Not sure if this is the best way to post this, but I thought I'd run with it for now. Apologies if there is a better way/place to share this on the forums.

 

Anyway, this is my most recent poem. I've been wrestling with it for quite some time, and have finally decided to release it into the wild. You saw it here first, folks 🙂

 

It's not really about anything solid, more just a bunch of words and images I threw together. I describe it as "abstract" or maybe "surreal" for want of better terms.

 

Feedback appreciated

 

@Shaz51 @Hams @TAB @greenpea @Appleblossom @Clawde 

(List nowhere near complete, just some names that came to mind quickly)

 

The Underneath

 

The underneath is a simple place

Undisturbed by expectation

There inertia accelerates

In pursuit of a golden silence

 

A relentless void of scattered screams

Far too dispersed to be heard

An emptiness full of the waves

Of frozen melancholy

 

This landscape conjures a certain dread

Yet dreams continue in their quest

To install eternal smiles

On the faces of the forgotten

 

In tribute to the desperation

Driving today into tomorrow

Sense no longer seems essential

Provided the sun still sets

-

Prone to bouts of inspiration

Suffered in response to life

I submit to the ecstasy

That succeeds the saddest laughter

 

StuF

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TAB
Senior Contributor

Re: A new poem

Im no poet @StuF isnt it or cant it be about pentameter? Anyhoo...
um did you mean to use 'succeed' in last bit? Did you mean come after ?
Anyway onya. More create than my last 7 years output lol

Re: A new poem

Powerful Poem Comrade

@StuF 

Re: A new poem

Thanks @TAB !

 

Succeed can also mean come after 🙂

Re: A new poem

Thanks @Appleblossom 🙂

TAB
Senior Contributor

Re: A new poem

I shoulda looked it up ok succession re kings @StuF

Re: A new poem

I expect to get a few people with that @TAB lol

 

It was originally "follows" but "succeeds" sounds better imo

TAB
Senior Contributor

Re: A new poem

It follows that I succeeded @StuF
.. I succeeded as follows..
TAB
Senior Contributor

Re: A new poem

https://youtu.be/d5FTmyzn9vc
@greenpea @StuF yer not musik-thread oops
TAB
Senior Contributor

Re: A new poem

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